Thursday 17 May 2018

The Singing Inspector: Jesse's Diary


Jesse’s diary : The Singing Inspector

The other day the singing inspector came and his name was Mr Raymond.
He came into the classroom and called up two people, Charles and Benny. Mr Raymond was pointing on the modelater. “Can’t you even sing the Blue Bells of Scotland or Minstrel Boy!
“What can you even sing! We can sing Pretty Polly said Charles. Then sing it! Shouted Mr Raymond who was turning red and looked just like a Devil with horns in his fiery dome.


They both sang terribly. Charles sang, what’s o’clock, what’s o’clock in a very low sort of voice and Benny sang, Pretty Polly, Pretty Polly in very high sort of voice because he was very scared and we all like felt like bursting out laughing but we were all too afraid.


In the middle of the song they both stopped because they ran out of breath. Mr Raymond was starting turn red again and shouted, “what a waste of time! Two voiceless idiots in a singing class! Send them out!
The other day the singing inspector came and his name was Mr Raymond.
He came into the classroom and called up two people, Charles and Benny. Mr Raymond was pointing on the modelater. “Can’t you even sing the Blue Bells of Scotland or Minstrel Boy!
“What can you even sing! We can sing Pretty Polly said Charles. Then sing it! Shouted Mr Raymond who was turning red and looked just like a Devil with horns in his fiery dome.

They both sang terribly. Charles sang, what’s o’clock, what’s o’clock in a very low sort of voice and Benny sang, Pretty Polly, Pretty Polly in very high sort of voice because he was very scared and we all like felt like bursting out laughing but we were all too afraid.

In the middle of the song they both stopped because they ran out of breath. Mr Raymond was starting turn red again and shouted, “what a waste of time! Two voiceless idiots in a singing class! Send them out!



I was saying over and over to myself, “Don’t call me, don’t  call me. Mr Raymond pointed to me and said, that girl over there with the blonde curls and the crystal blue eyes! I came up and sang Do Ray Me on the moderator. I think I did ok because he gave a little grunt. As I went to go sit down I felt like crying I was so terrified.


Next he called up Gladys Armstrong  and Iris. Iris tried to hide away but she wasn’t fooling anyone and he saw her.
She looked scared and when she tried to sing nothing came out of her mouth and I even think Gladys was shaking. “ What do we have here, the deaf and the dumb.” “Where’s your voice girl?”Said Mr Raymond. Then he called Gladys Long and winnie and said, “help  the paralyzed mutes! Said Mr Raymond.


I was so scared and hoped that he never came back again because he was so mean and judgmental to all of the other kids and I was definitely going to tell my dad about him and he is on the board of governors and I am sure he will remove that hateful bully! So that night my dad and I made a compromise that I never ever have to be tested by a Singing Inspector again.




1 comment:

  1. Tamsyn, your post is very well written. It is clear and flows easily. You have based it closely on the original text but have added your own original narration. Please go back and edit your post as you have somehow repeated the 2 middle paragraphs! Always read your post carefully before publishing it to make sure it’s the way you want it to be.

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